In sixth-grade pre-algebra, I blushed when Bobby Blackwell explained how 1 + 1 = 3. Now I see his twitchy grin everywhere…like on the stranger who forced his way inside me…or the one I’m waiting on to do the subtraction.
53 thoughts on “gargleblaster: addition and subtraction”
Whoa. That it hard right in the gut. I hope you are not writing from personal experience, but if you are I’m sorry…so, so sorry. Excellent use of the prompt.
Sometimes I forget we are telling stories in Gargleblasters and then I find something like this…beginning, middle, and shocking end. And beautifully written, at that–Bobby Blackwell’s twitchy grin is all I can see. This is so good.
Whoa. That it hard right in the gut. I hope you are not writing from personal experience, but if you are I’m sorry…so, so sorry. Excellent use of the prompt.
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Not personal experience. Thank you for reading. :)
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Didn’t see the dark twist coming. Wow. Powerful stuff. Best wishes!
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Thank you.
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You got me. Completely off guard. I love how you twisted it around. Great take on the prompt!
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Thanks so much!
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That hit me right in the gut! Powerful imagery and excellent answer to the prompt!
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Thank you!
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wow. this is powerful!
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Thank you.
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YIKES this was a tough one to digest.
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Thanks for reading, Christina!
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Wow. Powerful. Best one I’ve read so far.
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Thank you so much. I can’t wait to check out the grid!!
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Well, wow. Powerful, gut-wrenching, yes; but also, craftwise, brilliant.
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Thanks so much, Jennifer. I really appreciate that.
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Damn. That’s some good writing. You gave me chills.
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Wow. Thank you!!
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whoa. so intriguing.
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Thanks!
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Very powerful–glad to hear it’s fiction. That twitchy grin was a lasting image.
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Thank you, Marcy. :)
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Pow. End is aces.
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Thanks so much!
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“twitchy grin” sums it up. Subtraction will not make things equal, but will remove him from lifes’ equation. Great writing.
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Thanks Claudette! It’s an unbalanced equation for sure.
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Wow, totally crazy. This was super good!
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Thank you, Jen!!
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Woah! That hit back, hard. A very strong image you’vd created here. The twist was well presented!
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Thanks so much. :)
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Phenomenal! So very sad and heart-wrenching.
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Thank you, C.C.
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Wow. That was a hard-hitting story…so well written in so few words!
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Thanks! I really appreciate that.
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Ouch! this hit me hard..what a take on the prompt!
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Thank you!
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I like the name you chose, Bobby Blackwell. Like an abysmal, dark cave.
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oOo! I hadn’t even thought of that. Thanks for pointing it out. :)
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Oh, I thought you had done that purposely. In any case, I voted for you! :-)
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Well thank you very much. I really appreciate it! It was nice getting four extras to vote on; there were so many good entries–including yours! :)
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:-) You are very kind.
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Wow! This is honest and chilling, and expertly crafted. I can almost see the twitchy grin. A clever and compelling 42 words.
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Thank you, Joanne! I appreciate it. :)
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This is so powerful and tugs at a number of emotions while using simple, straightforward words. Very good!
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Thank you so much!!
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Oof – I agree with the other comments: your tone change after the first sentence packed a wallop, GC.
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Thank you! I think. :)
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Punch in the gut brilliant.
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Thank you!!
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Sometimes I forget we are telling stories in Gargleblasters and then I find something like this…beginning, middle, and shocking end. And beautifully written, at that–Bobby Blackwell’s twitchy grin is all I can see. This is so good.
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This comment is so kind. THANK YOU. It made my day. Really. :)
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Oh wow…that was completely unexpected! Horrified and yet in awe at your writing…
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Thank you. :)
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